Now that we have reviewed the six traits and discussed the importance of proofreading, revising, and copy editing, it is your turn. Your writing assignment for this lesson is to create a final draft of your definition paper. You will need to proofread, revise, and copy edit that paper so that it is much improved from what you turned in earlier in lesson 6.
After you have revised what you already have, you will write an extension paragraph that applies your definition to the literature of this course. For now, let’s focus on the revision process. Then I will give you the instructions for the literary application.
Pay close attention to any of the comments I gave you when I graded the rough draft. If I said you needed to clarify your criteria or one of your examples, then you should do that. This might require a little touch up or a complete overhaul.
Pay close attention to the checklists that are provided in this lesson.
Read your paper aloud. This will help you find places that need clarification or revision. If you want to take it a step further, have someone else read your paper aloud back to you. You know what it is supposed to say, but another set of eyes and ears will give new perspective.
Use your own best judgment. If something is not the way you like it, change it so that you do like it.
WARNING: If you do not revise your paper, the most you will receive is half credit. This means you SHOULD NOT just send another copy of your rough draft. Your grade on the final draft will reflect the amount of effective revision and effort you make.
I take the revising/proofreading element in this course very seriously, so do a good job. Regardless of how excellent your paper is as a rough draft, I guarantee you can make it even better. I look forward to reading your revised paper. Please submit it as part of your final portfolio after lesson 12.
What I’m Looking For
Incorporation of comments made on the rough draft
As you worked on your extended definition, you might have asked yourself, “What’s the point? Why is it important to define courage?” I am so glad you asked. We saw an example of an applied definition when we read the Supreme Court ruling in the case of treason. Now you get to apply your definition to the literature of this course.
Choose a character, real or fictional, that has appeared in the reading of this course. Then, decide if this character’s actions are courageous. You will use your definition of courage to defend your position. No character is off limits as long as he or she appears in this course. Obviously, you will want to choose a character who does something that might be considered courageous. Put those actions to the test. Do they meet each of your criteria? If so, the character can be considered courageous.
If not, then the character’s actions are not courageous. You will need specific evidence from the text to show if the character’s actions meet the criteria. Remember that to be truly courageous, the character’s actions must meet all of your criteria.
With online homework help, you should write your observations down. This graphic organizer will help.
Now let’s take a look at the application paragraph that was added to the end of the generosity paper based on the organizer:
In the short story “Shaving” by Leslie Norris, Barry, a teenager, takes time to shave his father’s beard. His father is sick and unable to do this daily task for himself. Barry’s actions are truly generous. They are voluntary with no expectation of reward.
His mother does not ask Barry to shave his father. She mentions the overgrown beard is bothering his father. Barry then volunteers to take care of it without expectation of a reward for doing so. Barry’s actions go above and beyond what might be expected. Most high school students are not required to shave someone else’s beard. Barry also uses his father’s straight razor, which requires more work.
He meticulously prepares for and cleans up from the task. This is going above and beyond. Shaving his father contributes to the greater good. It may not affect society as a whole but it does contribute to his father’s well-being. Barry does not shave his father in public. He does not help his father for the approval of others. He does it quietly without informing his friends or neighbors. Finally, there are no strings attached to Barry’s actions. He does not expect anything of his father in return.
Barry’s actions satisfy all of the criteria of a generous act. He gives a truly generous gift to his father.
Notice that in the example paragraph the criteria were not specifically stated again in the format “for an act to be…” but they were still mentioned. Also notice that some inferences were made. For example, the story does not say that shaving his father is not one of Barry’s ordinary tasks. We can infer this because most high school students are not asked to do this. You may have to make similar inferences.
Don’t forget a concluding statement that reaffirms whether or not your character was courageous. You will attach your paragraph to the end of your final draft of the definition paper.
What I’m Looking For:
Introduction that clearly states the character in question, the work of literature in which he or she appears.
Clearly identify the character’s actions as courageous or not courageous.
Evidence from the work of literature that clearly show why the character does or does not meet your criteria. Each criterion should be clearly stated.